Do you really want truthful advice, or do you want a big hug, telling you all will be well?
You say you have a Masters Degree?
Act like you do. Your grammar is below middle school level. Your approach is weak and indecisive, and does not express that of the highly degreed individual necessary to sit in a position, which can make or break a company's business. Human Resources is responsible to place and administrate the most correct applicant for key positions in a company. Do it wrong, and you can seriously affect the company's bottom line and/or reputation.
Why would I consider you as a candidate for my company, when you are NOT EXPRESSING THE STRENGTH NECESSARY TO ACCOMPANY SUCH A POSITION?
Now, here is something you won't get from a book.
Many 'Captains of Industry,' when looking for a department head, will not look at the resume of a candidate at all - until they read the cover letter. Why, you may ask? Because the resume itself usually looks good. Anyone can 'dummy' up a resume. Even if it is all true, it tells little about the actual person, their personality, how function, integrate with others, or think.
The cover letter, on the other hand, reflects the person. To a sharp executive, it outlines how the person express's themselves, how they think and organize their thoughts. A candidate with an inferior resume, but a great cover letter, will often get the position. A good analogy might be two boxers with the same exact schooling and skills, may be miles apart in quality. Having a skill set is one thing, how you apply them, is your individual uniqueness; what makes you greater than the sum of your parts. So, taking this line of thinking, what do I know about you? I know that in your present state, I would not entertain the thought of hiring you, even in a mid-level supervisory position.
Here is why. You wrote:
"Hi. I am 26 yrs old. I am MBA-HR and I slogged it out to complete my MBA sucessfully and I was hopeful about a bright career but things are not goin in the right direction for me."
A person with a 'Masters' wrote that? (and) Your don't see your problem? Spacing, punctuation, spelling, out the window. Write informally if you wish, when speaking with friends on non business related subjects. When speaking on ANYTHING related to your business, you MUST sound like you are a business person. The word 'slogged' you used; what does that mean? Your usage shows a 'drudgery.' a lack of motivation. Your entire paragraph is depressive and weak. ANY EXEC, who may read that, who might have wanted to help you, would turn away from such a candidate. Here is the same idea, with an example of a business rewrite.
I am 26 yrs old, and I have successfully completed my MBA in Human Resources. I am energetic, and motivated with regard to a successful career in my field. However, it has been almost a year, and as yet, have not found a suitable position equal to my qualifications. I don't want to lose my enthusiasm, and am quite willing to do what it takes. Can someone help by offering ideas or suggestions which may improve my chances, or opportunities.
Do you see the difference? You want an executive position, but you don't come off like an executive. I say executive, but I think you know what I am getting at. Your presentation shows weakness, not strength. You go on to say:
"If I do aomething I dont like, I quit in within a short tenure."
Why would you say that, even here? People who switch jobs, are looked at as unreliable. So, why is that even important to include, even in this advice blog? Look at yourself, the answer is right in your own words. You also say:
"I dont enjoy being at workplace." Do you not see a problem? It is possible your lack of success is your state of mind, and your manner of expressing?
You never know who might read this. Saying that, immediately knocks you out of the game. Why would you EVER write that? Do you want to be understood? I don't get that you 'THINK' like a business person. Personal stuff, NO! Keep personal issues, personal.
All in all, you do not come off as someone who is understanding of how business moves, and how businessmen think. Remember, you have an MBA - that is not a small thing to have.
Many people think that getting a degree is enough. That is barely a starting place. From that, you have to demonstrate: Good judgement, consistency, reliability, decisiveness, and strength of self and purpose. I suspect there are jobs available, I think if a prospective employer reads what you submit, he is seeing much the same thing as I do. An MBA may not have been the correct direction for you. You do not seem to have the conviction necessary to make it through the formative and development period. Before you get an executive position, you might be put into a lower position, allowing the executive team to evaluate your overall performance - before you are put into a position which can help, or harm the business.
Do NOT think since you have an MBA you get to start at a high level. You could, but more than likely you have to EARN it! You earn it by your performance in whatever part of the workplace you are in. If you as a candidate are not powerfully compelling, then you have to prove yourself by 'doing.'
By the DOING.
I hope this helps. Good luck.
Zenoian
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Jan 29, 2012 08:24 PM
